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Post by PlatinumSun on Feb 7, 2015 19:10:06 GMT
In my introduction, I mentioned that I made a poem from listening to Kimi no Mune in LaLaLa. This is that poem. TBH, I wasn't aware of this song until Pearlshipping TV posted their song analysis, so in a way you guys inspired me to make this poem. It can either be the perspective of Ash or Dawn. Light Within the Night
I lay down looking at the night
Watching all the sparkling lights
Everything is so unclear
Surrounded by my true fears
Alone, it feels cold and tense
I await your warm presence
Along with your beautiful smile
To brighten the sky for a while
Even though you are there
Giving me strength and energy
I can't seem to find any air
Feeling consumed mentally
I feel scared
But I don't care
Words come out
Without a doubt
Things I can freely tell you
Opposed to others I've talked to
I've never felt like this before
But it gives joy to my inner core
It's time to say goodbye
As the sun leaves the sky
Again, feeling cold and dark
I await for that special spark |
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Post by NovaStorm on Feb 7, 2015 19:31:55 GMT
Amazing poem PlatinumSun!! You captured Ash and Dawn's feelings so beautifully. and it makes me feel warm inside knowing that the video was an inspiration for this poem.  I might even put your poem up on DataCore with IceArceus's permission |
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Post by Madun on Feb 7, 2015 21:27:51 GMT
I must say, I never thought I'd see a peom here, but then again, I never looked for one because I hated them back in school. But it's actually quite nice without the need to overanalyze them. This one is quite beautiful. I especially like that it could easily refer to either of them.
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Post by icypiplup on Feb 8, 2015 2:51:35 GMT
That's a beautifully poem!
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Post by IceArceus on Feb 9, 2015 8:58:16 GMT
Yes, this would be lovely for datacore, but we need PlatinumSun's consent! |
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Post by PlatinumSun on Feb 9, 2015 17:44:47 GMT
It would be my honor to have this on Datacore.
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Post by PlatinumSun on Feb 11, 2015 23:02:50 GMT
In English class, my class went over a few poems. When I read When I Heard at the Close of the Day aka Calamus 11 by Walt Whitman, I couldn't help but make a new Pearlshipping poem. This is in perspective of Ash and his journey to Unova to his reunion with Dawn.
What I Heard at the Dawn of Day
When I entered myself into a new world of adventures, I was not that happy And when I discovered brand new friends, that smile wasn't shown If I had a good dream, one thing kept it from perfect As I walk towards my goal, I can't help but look back Each night, I see all the beautiful stars, but the prettiest of them was missing Until the sun came one day along with an angel that had great news On the thought that my special one, my close friend, was on her way, that smile finally showed up Each bite of food tasted sweeter, electric-fire consumed my body That night, the missing star shined more beautifully than before Waiting each day with joy and excitement to have her by my side A bounce with every step with anticipation to see her face Only for that face to sneak up behind me with a laugh and smile As our hands touched each other, our warm memories came back in me With the wind blowing by, secretly congratulating me For the one I care about is right by my side Day and night, her presence warms me inside Face to face, eye to eye, smile to smile; I was finally happy |
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Post by icypiplup on Feb 12, 2015 2:53:26 GMT
*mind explodes*
How do you write amazing poems?!
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Post by NovaStorm on Feb 12, 2015 5:35:17 GMT
Awesome poem!! That poem left me speechless! If you don't mind I'd like to add this poem to DataCore as well.  |
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Post by PlatinumSun on Feb 12, 2015 14:21:21 GMT
Thanks guys. I was actually nervous about this one because it was my first free verse poem. I actually left something out in line 7 so now it's fixed. I wouldn't mind if you put this on Datacore too
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need a break from that. I cannot express how much more I appreciate fan-translations of anything now