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Post by Nesh on Sept 30, 2017 22:28:05 GMT
I mean the battle isn't anything too fancy, I was writing a couple of rookies. I'll probably just end the chapter with Dawn catching her first Pokémon.
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Post by Nesh on Oct 2, 2017 18:20:43 GMT
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Post by Nafsika on Oct 2, 2017 18:56:55 GMT
Oh you're fast!!! Awesome!!! I'll start reading your story as quick as I can!!! I'm excited!!!!
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Post by Nesh on Oct 2, 2017 18:59:53 GMT
I'm not usually this fast, I'm just inspired.
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Post by Nafsika on Oct 2, 2017 20:35:32 GMT
Even better!!! Inspiration is the base to make a good story!!!
By the way do you mind to give me the link for the first chapter??? I remember that I saw it in a page but I can't remember in which!!!!
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Post by Nesh on Oct 2, 2017 20:41:09 GMT
Even better!!! Inspiration is the base to make a good story!!! By the way do you mind to give me the link for the first chapter??? I remember that I saw it in a page but I can't remember in which!!!! Here
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Post by Nafsika on Oct 2, 2017 22:58:33 GMT
Got it!!! Thank you!!! I'll post my review as soon as I can!!!
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Post by Nafsika on Oct 3, 2017 18:58:00 GMT
Hey guys!!!! I hope you don't mind to join you!!!! I finished the chapters and I'm here to tell you that it's a really good start!!!! To be honest I wasn't convinced that the changes you wanted to do will work but you proved me wrong!!! I laughed in Ash and Dawn`s first meeting and especially of how unimpressed was Dawn of Ash!!! I also liked that Dawn in your story looks more experience than Ash!!!! I was really surprised when Ash manage to put Pikachu in his pokeball!!! And I have to say that I'm impressed of Dawn`s battle skills!!! Nice touch to make Dawn help Ash to catch his first Pokémon!!! I hope that in the next capture Pikachu or Burmy!!!! In the next chapter I was a little socked of Pikachu`s cocky and mean behavior and for Dawn`s suggestion!!! Thank God that Ash is stubborn and he doesn't give up his Pokémon!!! The battle was really good for rookies!!! I really like the fact that one of Ash Pokémon has the move protect!!! I always wanted that for Ash!!! Thank you!!! And nice choice for Dawn!!! Jinx is nice Pokémon!!! Are you planning to evolve it to Luxray? Generally really good work!!! I can't wait for the next chapter!!!!
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Post by Nesh on Oct 3, 2017 22:20:59 GMT
If there's one thing Ash is god at it's battling. We're first introduced to him with him watching a high level battle on TV. So he'd probably know his way around a battle more than the day to day Trainer life; he was confident because that's his element. Yeah Dawn's Shinx will evolve.
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Post by Nafsika on Oct 3, 2017 22:51:48 GMT
Yes I remember that!!! I think is natural battlerer!!!
Ah that's nice!!! Luxray looks quite strong!!!
I have also another question for you!!! What's your plans for Pikachu!!! Don't get me wrong I like the way you handled things but I feel like that if Pikachu don't change then Ash won't be whole!!! If you think about it Pikachu is Ash`s alter ego, without him a lot of things couldn't have happened!!!
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