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Post by chosenone151 on Feb 15, 2017 15:04:43 GMT
Let me know how it goes! You're getting to where the story really kicks into gear, if you ask me haha
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Post by Nafsika on Feb 15, 2017 15:10:31 GMT
I will be back with my thoughts before you know it!!! You can count on that!!! I'm getting to be a big fan of your work!!!!
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Post by chosenone151 on Feb 15, 2017 15:36:01 GMT
Cool, and I'm glad! Oh, right! Since you mentioned the battle, I might as well post this.
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Post by Nafsika on Feb 15, 2017 21:41:20 GMT
I died and went to Heaven!!! That's so cool!!! They look so strong nad hot!!!
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Post by chosenone151 on Feb 15, 2017 22:54:58 GMT
lol well I'm glad you're a fan! Oh! And, there's this one, too.
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Post by Nafsika on Feb 16, 2017 12:10:02 GMT
Awesome scene and picture!!!! What a pity that Ash lost again!!! This time was so close to beat him!!! Anyway!!!! It's time for my review!!! I'm speechless!!! How the hell you manage to think and write all this thing!!! I couldn't do it!!! I'm reale impressed with your work!!! The meeting with Samurai was good and their battle was nice and in the midle of all these Team Rocket did what she always do!!! Creates problems for our heroes!!! But this scene was awesome thanks to Ash who used his aura to deal with them!!! That scene was so cool!!! I was wonder when you will make him use it and you found the perfect way to do it!!! And to make things better you put him to battle with Brock!!!! That was awesome and tough at the same time!!! I liked the fuct that you make Brock the same as we know him and love him!!! And the mind blowing was the battle with Dawn!!! You have thought everything!!! You really enjoyed writing this scene and appeared on the extent of the scene and the combination of moves you made for Pokémon!!! I could feel it!!!Do I also detect a favoritism toward to Dawn or I imagine things??? I mean the way you made Charizard to lose was great but impossible for a trainer in her level!!! Don't get me wrong I love Dawn and she is a great coordinator but Ash's Charizard is a tough guy!!! But you write the story and it's your call to make who lose and who wins!!! I realy enjoy the reading of your story!!! I hope to never end!!!! That's it for today!!! I'll try to ready today more chapters but I don't promise nothing because I don't know how the day will progress!!! See you later!!! I hope you enjoy today's review!!!
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Post by chosenone151 on Feb 16, 2017 16:21:27 GMT
Thank you! Yeah, I was reluctant to have Ash lose there, but he needed a reason to say "hey, I still need to improve." But, that doesn't mean he won't have another chance! I plan on them having a third battle long after this fic, but that's another story. And I'm glad the aura stuff came off well! I wanted to have him use it every now and again. Oh and thanks! I'm glad Brock was written well. I couldn't resist that rematch. Haha honestly I did catch a lot of flack for the Charizard thing when it first went up. In a serious battle, you're right, Charizard would trounce her team. But, Charizard showed the same flaw as he always does; he was cocky. He didn't take the battle seriously and left his defenses open. He didn't fly around either. Ash couldn't really go all out against here there lol, but that's something that isn't revealed until later. But I'm glad you liked the battle! Combinations are always fun. Thank you! Don't worry, there's plenty more haha. Sounds good! Do whatever works for you haha. I did, thank you! Oh, right! Here's art I did for that last chapter.
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Post by Nafsika on Feb 16, 2017 19:06:02 GMT
Yes I liked the way that you make the Pokémon go away and show Ash Aura abilities!!! It was realy nice!!! And Team Rocket was as we all know her and love her!!! I liked the fact that Charizard act that way!!! It was fun to watch Ash to say <<Please no this attitude again!!!>> Love Charizard!!! When I was little I wanted so bad to have ome!!! Not that now if they were real I wouldn't want him or her!!! That would be awesome!!! How you manage to do all this stuf and have personal life?? I mean you do a lot of stuf!!! And you stay focus and your story doesn't have any leaks!!! I admire you about that!!! You are a very determin person!!!
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Post by chosenone151 on Feb 16, 2017 20:39:08 GMT
lmao yeah Ash's Charizard is amazing. Don't worry, he'll avenge his reputation later on!
Thanks so much! Well, I've been writing this story since 2015, and I started up the idea in mid-2014, so it's been a long project. Plus, my girlfriend writes it with me!
It's difficult, but this project means a lot to me.
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Post by Nafsika on Feb 17, 2017 0:23:19 GMT
I'm glad to hear that Charizad's reputation will be restored!!!! A two minds are better than one!!! You are a lucky man!!!
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