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Post by Deleted on Mar 31, 2014 1:43:25 GMT
Hey I have a fic on Fanfiction and I wanted to link so whoever wanted too could read it and maybe give me what they think of it. Its only 2 chapters now and i have 5 chapters written but i havent gotten much buzz from it and i would like a little insight on what I can do to improve... My fic  |
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Post by IceArceus on Mar 31, 2014 6:37:25 GMT
Too Advancy for my liking if you know what I mean.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 31, 2014 13:07:10 GMT
its only chapter two the advance stuff is a set up the pearl stuff comes in chapter 3. which i am proofreading now...
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Post by Deleted on Apr 9, 2014 14:03:26 GMT
Chapter 3 is out now. Yay! Feel free to read and comment how you see fit.
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Post by Swag on Apr 11, 2014 17:10:38 GMT
I like your work ^_^ It's different in a good way ^_^ I like the title, 'The light at the end of the tunnel'. There is the fast-forwarded style in your story, right? It has great potential but I had this rushed feeling when I read it. Why did proff.Sycamore give Dawn a charmander? There must be a reason for him giving her a charmander rather than a Ralts or Flaffy.
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Post by Deleted on Apr 11, 2014 17:14:41 GMT
Hmmm thanks for the reply I didn't think it was rushed.I look over it again thanks for the feedback and dawns charmander will be explained. Thanks for the feedback. |
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Post by Deleted on Jun 12, 2014 15:16:15 GMT
Lol haven't updated this thread Chapter 4 is out! Well its been out... Link is on the first post.
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Post by SakuraBlossom on Jun 12, 2014 17:56:06 GMT
Your fic is going well so far. Keep it up. |
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Post by Chlobo on Jun 12, 2014 23:31:14 GMT
There's a typo in the summary. Karos should be Kalos, maybe fixing that typo might invite more readers in. I think you're doing okay so far. Just keep it up.
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Post by Deleted on Jun 13, 2014 14:48:55 GMT
Fixed the summary lol. Had no idea...
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need a break from that. I cannot express how much more I appreciate fan-translations of anything now